John’s Comments (group member since May 03, 2018)

John’s comments from the Beta Reading and Editing group.

Title: Snow Black
Genre: Literary Fiction
Length, Draft, and Language: 134,200 words, Draft #8, English (US)
Seeking: I mean, unpaid services would be pretty cool, but let me know if you're a professional and we can work something out.

Logline: “Skin as white as snow, lips as red as blood, and a heart as black as ebony” aptly describes Juleena Woods, dubbed “Snow Black,” a juvenile delinquent out on parole.

Sub Genre & Keywords: High school, Southern Gothic, Coming of Age, Gentrification, Immigration, Literature, Racism, Social taboos

Known Issues: Possibly too long, not enough verisimilitude
Critique Requested: Continuity, dialectical dialogue (American South, AAVE)

Method of Communication: Word Online and email

Disclaimers (violence, some strong language, implicit sex)