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I've got enough betas now. If you happen upon this before February 10 and really want to read this, message me and I can squeeze you in, but otherwise it's full. Thank you guys!

I’ll be emailing the manuscript sometime in late February and the deadline to get your critiques back to me will be just under a month after that. (When I know the date for sure, I’ll update this and contact those who have agreed to do it.)
Since it’s in the early stages of revision, I mostly need you to focus on big-picture things like characterization, plot, flow, dialogue, inconsistencies, etc. Not grammar yet at this stage! Thank you so much!
Jenna is supposed to be the Girl Going Places. So when she finds out she’s failing gym, it’s basically the end of the world. She’s never gotten so much as a C in a class, and how is she going to get into her dream college if she’s failing gym of all classes? To make matters worse, she and her best-friend-who-she’s-kind-of-in-love-with’s friendship is starting to show cracks. But then comes someone she never expected to grow close to, and he reminds her of the thing she misses most – Alaska’s pink skies.
Caught between her structured life and the chance at a new one, Jenna spends one critical semester trying to make everything go back to how it was. With fear of failure following her every move, Jenna must fight for the life and love she deserves.
As her world begins to unravel around her, Jenna discovers that when you finally decide to follow your heart, the right person will follow it with you.

You don’t have to be a writer or an editor to read this (though I will take either of those!). I just need someone who will read the summary as if it’s a tiny book and let me know what works and what doesn’t! The best critiques would be on characters, plotline, conflict, and anything else like that.
I’ll take as many beta readers as who want to read the summary. I’ll be emailing it on July 5 and I’ll need it back to me by July 15. Thank you so much!
Norah, a girl with a father who’s forgotten her, and Sterling, a boy who thinks the only way to fix his past is by taking chances in the present, are both on their way to London when their lives cross on the plane. But then Norah’s mom calls and tells her she’s found out she has been getting along with her stepmother – and her mom is jealous enough to tell her she’s not welcome to stay with her anymore. To make matters worse, this was going to be Norah’s final summer just visiting London – her plan was to stay this time, to escape the pain of her dad’s Alzheimer’s back home. Being on bad terms with her mother isn’t exactly going to help that situation.
As Norah goes through ups and downs in her relationship with her boyfriend, Rupert, and grows closer to Sterling, everything changes. Relationships are broken and mended, secrets are revealed, and Norah is stripped of her security blankets. As the summer comes to a close, Norah has to decide what she really wants, and she has to act on that choice before everything falls apart. Because you never really know how much time you have left.


Jenna is the MC and she's kind of sarcastic and funny (think Julia in Meant to Be). She is in love with her best friend Paul and thinks there might actually be a chance for something to happen between them but at some point they kiss and he realizes it was a mistake and makes it clear nothing is going to happen between them. Their friendship kind of dribbles off after that and Jenna becomes friends with this guy named Charlie and eventually they fall in love. Ooh, also she's a really hardworking student but her suppressed dream is to go to Alaska. Charlie helps her realize that dream and she finally follows it. Basically the theme will be Follow your gut and the right person will follow it with you. It's supposed to be a YA Romantic Comedy thing and she's clumsy and likes big words.
So basically I need a title. I'm thinking it might have a funny word in it, like "canoodle" or "cantankerous" or "epitome." Maybe something like "The Epitome of ____"? I was thinking maybe "The Epitome of Everything" but I would really love any other suggestion. If it's cute or funny or quirky that would be perfect. If anyone can give me any suggestions at all, I will seriously love you forever.
Thank you so much to whoever tries to help! It's much appreciated!

Jenna is the MC and she's kind of sarcastic and funny (think Julia in Meant to Be). She is in love with her best friend Paul and thinks there might actually be a chance for something to happen between them but at some point they kiss and he realizes it was a mistake and makes it clear nothing is going to happen between them. Their friendship kind of dribbles off after that and Jenna becomes friends with this guy named Charlie and eventually they fall in love. Ooh, also she's a really hardworking student but her suppressed dream is to go to Alaska. Charlie helps her realize that dream and she finally follows it. Basically the theme will be Follow your gut and the right person will follow it with you. It's supposed to be a YA Romantic Comedy thing and she's clumsy and likes big words.
So basically I need a title. I'm thinking it might have a funny word in it, like "canoodle" or "cantankerous" or "epitome." Maybe something like "The Epitome of ____"? I was thinking maybe "The Epitome of Everything" but I would really love any other suggestion. If it's cute or funny or quirky that would be perfect. If anyone can give me any suggestions at all, I will seriously love you forever.
Thank you so much to whoever tries to help! It's much appreciated!

Every Reason I Love You
Please let me know what you think and comment on the story please, not here. Thank you so much!

A poem called "I am too happy to fall asleep"
and a short story in verse called A Boy Named Bailey .
Thank you guys so much! God bless!


2. The Summer I Turned Pretty series
3. Romeo and Juliet
4. Hush, Hush series
5. Meant To Be
Of course, I'm probably wrong about these haha. They're just off the top of my head.








