Hey i am a first time writer and this paragraph just came to me this evening and would like reviews on it to see if i should carry on thank you .....
She gritted her teeth no matter how hard she tried she couldn't block the feeling out, the memories, the visions, the sounds, the smells. It was all too overwhelming for her. Everything she had just seen was almost too much to bare. The man she loved so dearly had just been cruelly ripped away from her and Brought back from the dead by something she can only describe as a horrifying monster something nightmares are made of. Never before had she felt so many different feelings all at once. The deep and strong smell of iron still lingered in her nostrils. The sound of tearing flesh. Then all of a sudden a noise that nearly burst her eardrums an ear piercing scream of the likes she had never heard before and then she realised he was changing. Writhing in pain screaming, convulsing. She couldn't take any more she had to go had to leave and run somewhere, anywhere as fast as her legs could carry her. Heart pounding, breathing deep and shallow beads of sweat pouring from her hairline.
She gritted her teeth no matter how hard she tried she couldn't block the feeling out, the memories, the visions, the sounds, the smells. It was all too overwhelming for her. Everything she had just seen was almost too much to bare. The man she loved so dearly had just been cruelly ripped away from her and Brought back from the dead by something she can only describe as a horrifying monster something nightmares are made of. Never before had she felt so many different feelings all at once. The deep and strong smell of iron still lingered in her nostrils. The sound of tearing flesh. Then all of a sudden a noise that nearly burst her eardrums an ear piercing scream of the likes she had never heard before and then she realised he was changing. Writhing in pain screaming, convulsing. She couldn't take any more she had to go had to leave and run somewhere, anywhere as fast as her legs could carry her. Heart pounding, breathing deep and shallow beads of sweat pouring from her hairline.
once again thank you ...