What's 811 Reading? discussion

If you could change something about your book, what would it be?
-More action?
-Dialogue?
-More interesting language? Sentence structure?

For a “4”: Did I….
• Write a topic sentence that provided the title, author, and genre of my text?
• Provide context of what is happening in the text, so my reader understands what I’m talking about?
• Find a direct quote from the text that proves my idea?
• Thoroughly explain the significance of my quote/how it proves my idea?
• Check for correct punctuation and spelling?

In the novel Thirteen Reasons Why by Jay Asher, the thing I would like to change about this book is to add more dialogue from the protagonist. In this book, the story is mostly told through the 13 cassette tapes. This book is about a girl who suicided and made tapes to 13 people for the reasons why she took her life. The girl Hannah who suicided told her story and gave out all 13 reasons to all 13 people telling them why she decided to let her life go. When Hannah is talking in the cassette the words are in italic which is most of the book and the person listening to it is Clay Jensen. It doesn't show a lot of the dialogue and actions of what is happening to Clay when he is listening to the tape. The story would be more interesting if it told us more about how Clay's life was like and what he was feeling more often.

In James patterson's realistic fiction novel The Fire the thing that I would change in my book is interesting language it feels like my protagonist's Whit and wisty just blah, blah, blah all the time. It has lots of action and dialogue but not so interesting language. What my book probally needs is a clif hanger to leave the reader in suspense to modivate the reader to keep reading so they can see what happens next. Whit and Wisty do have lots of adventures but when they go on them it feels like one of them is narrorating. All i'm trying to say is the only thing that the book needs is interesting language.

In Stephanie S. Tolan's fictional novel, Surviving the Applewhites, the thing I would like to change in this book is less dialogues and more action to what a certain character does in this book. I realized that this book has way too much dialogue and communication and too little action going on. This is why I became confused in some part of each chapter. There were even a chapter without action and all dialogues. So, I suggest the author to have some dialogue and some actions. If the author do change it, there would be more understanding to the story of this book and would be a very interesting book to read. Therefore, this is why I suggest this change to the author.

In Steve Augarde's fiction book, X-isle, the thing I would like to change in this book is more action and awesome dialogue. The book was about a flood that occurred in Steve's hometown. The flood came from a dam that collapsed. People heard about the flood coming from the radio and the newspaper. Docks had boats ready for civilians to escape from the flood and head to X-isle. X-isle is an island and nobody knows about it. Some survivors survived with Steve in boats. The dialogue was kinda less dramatic childish. For example, The protagonist states, "Man if we don't get out of here, we are toast! Wet Toast." I want something like, "Come on! We are gonna die; And we might die without dignity." This quote shows that the dialogue should be serious and not childish? The action was kinda boring, they said that people died because of the flood but the author wasn't specific. I want to know how they died. Did they drowned to death? Did the splashing killed them? Or did they crashed to their death? Therefore, I want more action and more serious dialogue.

Defriended

In Ruth Baron's fiction novel, Defriended, I think there should be more action because in the beginning of the book, it starts out with Jason in school, then he goes home and talks to Lacey. I think there should be a part where Rakesh and Jason get into a fight about why Jason is always talking to a girl he never met before and how he would text Lacey back in class but not him."Dude, why didn't you answer my texts?" Rakesh said. That was when Rakesh texted Jason but he didn't reply. Therefore there should be more action or many people won't want to continue reading.

In the novel, Staying Fat For Sarah Byrnes, by Chris Crutcher, I think that there should be a little more dialogue into this book. This book is about a man by the name Eric is a little worried about his old childhood friend, Sarah Byrnes, who is at a hospital. To him the hospital seemed like a sad play of Snow White and the Seven Dwarves, and Sarah is Snow White. Life is turning into a play. The theater is this hospital room, and mine is the finest seat in the house"(269). This shows that when Eris sees his friend on the bed all silent, he feels like that there's nothing for him to do, so I think that this book could use more dialogue.

In J.K Rowling's fantasy novel Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire I think Rowling should put more thoughts of the main protagonists. Right now Harry is in deep doo-doo, he has been entered into a Triwizard Tournament. Put he didn't enter himself, someone put his name in to kill him. He has reached out to his godfather, Sirus. He is trying to help Harry be okay in the last task, and make sure he isn't harmed in anyway. I chose to ask more of thoughts about the protagonist. this novel is written in 3rd person so the author is able to put how the people other than harry feel. When i read these series, Rowling doesn't speak of how the other people think. I don't want to just read about Harry's thoughts. I want to read about Ron's, Hermione's and other people thoughts. It gets boring about reading just Harry. Therefore, I would change the how much thoughts about other people.

In Andy Hillstrand's non-fiction book, Time Bandit, if I were to change something in the book, I would add in more pictures throughout the book. Andy and Jonathan Hillstrand were born to be fishermen. They were raised in Alaska and were surrounded by sea and fish which led them to become King Crab fishermen, one of the world's deadliest jobs. They own a ship called the Time Bandit hence the title of the book. Andy stated, "The man threw me down and chased after me as I ran out of the bar for my life." This quote shows an incident where a picture could have helped the reader better visualize the event. This event is not the only part of the book in which a picture could have been inserted. In the book, there were 5 pages of just pictures in the middle but did not relate to their job. Therefore, instead of having several pages of off topic images, it would be best to have pictures spread out throughout the book in certain places.

In Janet Tashijan novel, The Gospel Accoring to Larry, I would change more actions. Josh made a website where he made a character called Larry. No one knows who Larry is but himself. Every week he posts a item of Larry and he writes about his daily life and his problems. But Larry or him doesnt include a lot actions. 'We dont know who Larry is because he doesnt do anything," I think this proves that Janet should put more actions in the book. The book isnt good without actions. Therefore, she should add more actions.

Happy Families

In Tanita S. Davis' realistic fiction, Happy Families, I would change Happy Families with more action and dialogue because I don't really understand what is going on in the text. In the text is about Ysabel is not like her mom but she was park for the concert that night. In the text it states, " Um, mom. You know Cory Vick's band is doing music tonight, right...That boy's drum don't scare me, Ysabel." This quote states that a lot of these things are happening all at once and want to make the text more descriptive. Therefore, I rather change the text in Happy Familiesmore descriptive and more interesting.

In my fiction book, Lord Of The Rings by J Tolkien, a

In my fiction book, Lord Of The Rings by J.R.R. Tolkien, a thing I would change is nothing. I like this book the way it is. I would not like to change it because the story line and the plot is amazing, the characters names are amazing, and the conflicts are amazing. My favorite part of the book is when Gandalf shows Frodo what it says inside he ring. "One ring to rule them all, one ring to find them, one ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them." This quote is from a pen that was written and those word were engraved inside the ring. Those words are one of the most well known quotes by anyone who read Lord Of The Rings.

In G. Neri realistic fiction book, Yummy something that I would change in the book is just to add color and not leave it as black and white so we can see the way people were like back then. Now thats all i would change because in the book, Yummy the thug was doing a pledge for the gang, and if there was color we could see or get more of a clue of how it was at this moment.