Aspiring Authors and more ... discussion

Here I will list the initials of my specific work since I will be posting different passages from my various books. :) If you are going to comment, please put it into italics. Please comment and critic my work! :D

BC
Michael's view

The hairs on the back of my neck seemed to lift, alarming me immediately there was a threat in the classroom. I could see myself through the eyes of another student, my face impassive, my pose strong and tall. Not a worry of doubt. Inside though, I was suspicious as my eyes glanced around the whole room, looking for the threat. For my kind at least.
The vampires.

I'll delete your other topic if you like, it seems like you double posted accidently :D

That'd be great ^_^ Thanks!

Summary for possibly new book I'm writing.

Alissa isn't your popular girl or your geek. She thinks of herself as a kick ass nerd. Alissa is your go-getter. When she moved to Chicago, she knew things were going to brighten for her and she was determined to make it happen. Till she turned 13. That's when Will came into her life. Sure, everyone has enemies, and usually Alissa has none, but now, anytime she sees Will, she can't stand him. At. All. And Alissa is determined to make sure he stays out of her life.


Will knows he's the best athlete in the state. Nothing can stop him, or so what people keeps telling him. He's not your jock of football, he runs. He runs fast! Will knows he can be a professional runner and he knows how to make it happen. Who needs good grades to get a life? Everything is just perfect for him, the perfect family, perfect girlfriend, the perfect life. All but one person sticks out. Alissa.

Alissa and Will hate each other. It's not just some teasing friendly feud. Oh no, it's like war. Alissa is one side of the spectrum and Will the other. Nothing will ever end the accident of age 13 and nothing will ever get them over it. Everyone knows it, no one challenges it. Not till the letter comes in the mail about a night to remember.





What do you guys think?

That sounds cool!!!!

sounds cool! can't wait to read it!

Cool. I like it.