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message 1: by Dark Phreak (new)

Dark Phreak Arts (DarkPhreakArts) | 52 comments Mod
Okay, as there were soooo many people wanting to read nit bits that Lily had written (including meh!) here's a thread for her to post it here or post links!! Yeah Lily I know how evil I am, but it was created by public demand and you can't do anything about it!

So enjoy!


message 2: by Sammi, Cherry Blossom (new)

Sammi (Sammi-N) | 45 comments Mod
Ah... i forgot about this. I started a fanfiction AGES ago based on the harry potter series. I only did one chapter before i became bored. This is the only evidence i've ever written anything lol. Excuse the terrible-ness.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7302594/1...


message 3: by David (new)

David Staniforth (davidstaniforth) | 34 comments I should have known it would it include (Alan Rickman = God)Snape ;~)

If you've not written much fiction Lily, I think that shows a lot of promise. There's only a hint of your voice in there though, and that is what would make your writing burst into life. That's to be expected with fan-fiction I suppose.

More please :D


message 4: by Sammi, Cherry Blossom (last edited May 01, 2013 05:45AM) (new)

Sammi (Sammi-N) | 45 comments Mod
LOL of course God is included, though i still managed to lose interest. I suppose thats what happens when your recyling other peoples characters and the like.

I wouldnt have the first clue how to remove my voice from it to be honest... i suppose its just practise i guess :) !


message 5: by David (last edited May 01, 2013 06:55AM) (new)

David Staniforth (davidstaniforth) | 34 comments Noo... Don't remove your voice, put more in. That's what makes it uniquely yours :D


message 6: by Dark Phreak (new)

Dark Phreak Arts (DarkPhreakArts) | 52 comments Mod
I agree ... Sort yourself out woman and write more ... Need more!!!


message 7: by Sammi, Cherry Blossom (new)

Sammi (Sammi-N) | 45 comments Mod
Gemma wrote: "I agree ... Sort yourself out woman and write more ... Need more!!!"

Sort me... *sputters* p'cha, charming lol.

Ok David will give that a try, the only problem is, the storyline i had in mind wasn't comedic in anyway, will have to figure that one out.


message 8: by David (last edited May 01, 2013 09:34AM) (new)

David Staniforth (davidstaniforth) | 34 comments The author's voice is just your way of phrasing things. If an author has a strong voice, you can tell who wrote it if you've read them before. If you write true to your voice, I think the characters come to life more, because they are coloured with something genuine. In a way, all the characters in "Alloria" have elements of me in them. There's a strong authorial voice in your reviews, you just need to shade that voice to suit different characters. It's like an painter can be recognised by their brushstrokes, or an actor by their presence.

Sorry, didn't intend to turn your group into something serious.

*Pulling a funny face now to make up for it >8~)*


message 9: by Jim (new)

Jim | 12 comments But David is right about the voice.
How would you tell the story of an incident to a group of friends?
That's your voice :-)
Now write it down, get rid of the 'ums' and 'erms' and you're getting somewhere
You might want to add in grammar and punctuation but do that later.
Set yourself a challenge, decide that tomorrow you're going to write up a bus trip (or whatever).
But decided BEFORE it happens. Then you'll be amazed at what you see as you desperately try to find things to write about.
For example today, leaving Tesco, I decided that tall thin ladies with haggard faces should look at themselves before they leave home. Whilst the clothes might well have been elegant, combining them with pixie boots meant she looked like the wicked queen of the fairies


message 10: by Sammi, Cherry Blossom (new)

Sammi (Sammi-N) | 45 comments Mod
ROFL!!! Thats ace!!!! I never really thought about that before, but it makes alot of sense.

Now you've pointed it out i can see it in the writing and expressions. For example my best friend is writing a book and i have been privileged to read some of it so far, and i can see her in the words.

Well, i might dust off my story book log and have a flip through, draft something up for a chapter one :)


message 11: by David (new)

David Staniforth (davidstaniforth) | 34 comments Here endeth lesson one :~)


message 12: by Sammi, Cherry Blossom (new)

Sammi (Sammi-N) | 45 comments Mod
David wrote: "Here endeth lesson one :~)"

Thank you sensei!


message 13: by David (new)

David Staniforth (davidstaniforth) | 34 comments Lesson two: find a hook to make the reader care about the characters. That doesn't mean they have to like them, hate is equally as viable as love. I find it very hard to invest time in reading a book if the characters don't interest me. Rather like going to a party full of dull people :~/


message 14: by Dark Phreak (new)

Dark Phreak Arts (DarkPhreakArts) | 52 comments Mod
Hey when did we start class?


message 15: by David (new)

David Staniforth (davidstaniforth) | 34 comments Erm...

*Hides in shame*


message 16: by Jim (new)

Jim | 12 comments David wrote: "Lesson two: find a hook to make the reader care about the characters. That doesn't mean they have to like them, hate is equally as viable as love. I find it very hard to invest time in reading a bo..."

It's like that jerk in Catcher in the Rye. I cannot read the book because I keep wanting to kick him


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