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Feb 27, 2014 11:09PM
Just a place where I will post some short stories or poems. :-) Feedback is welcome and encouraged, please do not be shy! I promise I don't bite... Most of the time
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(view spoiler)She felt herself starting to lose control again, a feeling of panic rising in her stomach. Her teeth clenched together as she tried to stop the power building up in her body. This wasn't supposed to happen, not here, not when she had just thought she might actually get a break. What was she thinking? When had life ever given her a break? A hysteric laugh bubbled out of her lips before she quickly snapped her mouth shut once more. If she could just keep her powers at bay for long enough that she could find a secluded area, maybe everything would be alright. She started walking purposefully out of the semi-crowded resturaunt, keeping her breaths measured and even. She was almost out the door when a waitress stopped her and asked where the hell she thought she was going without paying. No, she thought, No, just let me through. Don't you know what's about to happen? But how would the lady know that she was about to blast this place apart? Exactly, she wouldn't. "Please just ley me through, I will pay you, I promise, I just have to get out right now," she said in a voice brimming with urgency. The waitress nodded and stepped aside so she could walk through. Maybe she knew something was going on by the crazed look in Amandas eyes or maybe she was just feeling extra generous, but she didn't waste time contemplating why the lady would let her go, her focus was on holding in the energy bubbling in her veins and getting away from all of these people. I'm going to make it, she thought as her hand reached up to grip the cold metal of the doorknob. I'm going to- the door she had just came in contact with blew apart as an earthquake of power rippled out from under her feet, destroying everything in it's path. The roof was just starting to rain down from the ceiling like hail when Amandas knees buckled out from underneath her and the world turned black and soundless.
good whoa :)sorry I just had that immediate reaction
I wasnt always like this you know. I used to be free and wild and i used to wear my heart on my sleeve. I did what i pleased, not giving a second thought to anything. And then there was this boy, this wonderfully awful boy. I thought it was love, thought it was fate that we could end up together. I was so naive back then, wasnt i? I remember sitting by the phone, just waiting for him to call me. And the smile that would light up my face when he would compliment my hair or outfit. All i wanted to do was impress him, have him love me as much as i loved him. I became obsessed with the idea that if i could just be a little skinnier, a little prettier, if my teeth were just a little whiter and my skin a little smoother, he might like me as much as i wanted him to. See, boys like him are poison. They mess with your head, make you do the craziest of things. I lost my mind trying and trying and trying to be good enough for him. I just kept thinking that i was almost there, almost good enough. Skip breakfast, you dont want him thinking youre a fatass. Run that extra mile, who would like a girl with big thighs? Maybe if i wore these heels he would find my calfs more attractive? And i know youre wondering why the hell i would care about what he thought about me in the first place, but let me explain. There was the feeling that he could give you, this feeling that you were the brightest star in his universe when he would look at you a certain way, speak to you in that low voice of his. That feeling was a drug to me, what i craved everyday. It made me do crazy things, made me throw my life away. I didnt realize it back then, but i wasnt me anymore. I was a shell of a person living only to try and attain perfection. I tried so hard but in the end it only broke me because there is no such thing as perfect. And thats why i am the way i am now because he made me go crazy trying to be something that doesnt exsist.
Great work! You're writing is very honest, and it captures a lot in just one blurb. :)
"You are the universe, expressing itself as a human for a little while" -Eickhart Tolle
And all of your writing is really good too! :D
Aha, thank you! I saw that picture and thought that quote went with it perfectly
(view spoiler)The sun reflecting off of the water was bright enough to blind. Birds cawed loudly and obnoxiously all around me. It was so hot I was scared I was going to melt right into the warm sand I was standing on. Everything was too extreme, my body felt ready to explode.
I lifted my hand to my eyes in an attempt to block out the sunlight and make out my surroundings. What I saw was a beach empty of anyone except for a woman a few feet ahead of me, knee deep in water. Her brown hair fanned out behind her and I caught a wiff of her vanilla perfume. She turned around when I caught sight of her and when our eyes met the strangest feeling of deja vu came over me. She looked like me, only her eyes were a pleasant jade green while mine were a bright aqua.
She gave me a knowing smirk before she turned back out towards the sea. She continued walking, until her feet couldn't touch the bottom and she began to swim. As she swam further and further away from the beach (and from me) a burning sense of dread knawed away at my stomach.
The sun hid behind a large angry looking cloud. The birds went quiet. A chill rolled up my spine as all went still like the calm before the storm. I watched as a large wave rolled towards the woman in the water, about to come crashing down. A sudden realization hit me like a bag of bricks and I yelled out
"Mom, come back"
Aw shucks, thank you! Just a little something I've been working on
Oh wow sorry I haven't updated any writing for about a month, but I'm working on a little something right now so :-)
Carrie wrote: "[spoilers removed]The sun reflecting off of the water was bright enough to blind. Birds cawed loudly and obnoxiously all around me. It was so hot I was scared I was going to melt right into the w..."
Whoa, that's the best one yet! (In my opinion, because the ending was incredible for unexplainable reasons. xD) The one about Amanda was interesting too, and the one about the girl is indeed honest. I like your writing a lot, so I'll be waiting for your new "project" (at the edge of my seat)! :)
❅║▌Aʟᴇssɪᴀ wrote: "Carrie wrote: "[spoilers removed]The sun reflecting off of the water was bright enough to blind. Birds cawed loudly and obnoxiously all around me. It was so hot I was scared I was going to melt r..."
Awwww, thank you so much! That makes me happy :-) I will update soon (hopefully)
