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There where 4 student who all came from different places. Their names where: Julia,Kyle,Jeni,and Alex. They all never even knew each other names until they became friends at the school named: Dark Magic.

Chapter 1: Morning
Julia wakes up and goes and gets in the shower. She washed her hair and puts on some jeans a crop top and a beanie on ther hair she dried out and brushes her teeth and heads down to breakfast. Her sister was fighting with her brother she sighed at them and her mom yelled. She looked at her messed up family.

Kyle was in Scotland and he awoke to his brothers and sisters playing. He frowned mad says"wee children cut that noise down" he hated how they always woke him up. He sighed and got up and went in the shower then got dressed and got on his motorcycle heading to the library. He had graduated high school and was signing in for college he wanted to go to the DarkMagic School .The name sounded weird but they had good education there and his father had went there.

Jeni awoke to her raggedy apartment and Got in the shower. She had been living alone since her sister died in a car crash. She got dressed and headed to go babysit. She always babysat kids and after that she would take care of the elderly. When she got to the Phillips house she rang the door bell. She smiled and walked in as the bell buzzed. Kayli was sitting down in the floor slobbing everywear. Kayli is a little girl with Down syndrome, when Jeni went to hug Kayli she had put slob on her when she kissed her cheek but Jeni didn't care.

Thanks Z, it's just something I made up I don't honestly know if I will even finish it i wired to at least try to write a small book with at least 10 chapters

I'm kinda curious to what happens next

Thanks I'm trying to finish a. Book but will start writing in my writer journal tonight in my phone then I will transfer everything to here

Thanks I'm trying to finish a. Book but will start writing in my writer journal tonight in my phone then I will transfer everything to here

Alright

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:D

Do you write?

The story sounds interesting so far but grammatical errors are making the reading kind of a headache.

Also, all these kids take showers in the morning? I always took a shower at night before school the next day! haha

Yeah I'm just starting to actually focus on writing I'm going to move things around soon and I am going to get to the good part. I'm just drafting something up.i want to be a writer and everyone told me my writing was good and so I decided to join this group to write.

this is good :) but I think I should tell you that Scottish people don't actually really say 'wee' like that often. it's a stereotype :)

Annie, your writing is good. But let me give you some advice, and don't take this the wrong way.

Spelling, punctuation and grammar are really important. Work on that.

I'm no expert, I've had a couple things published but I'm not perfect. I misspell and add to many commas a lot.
But I beta read for friends/ acquaintances pretty often and besides obvious errors like these, we look for story content problems. I can give you better pointers about the story itself if I can get past the run-on sentences, etc.

Like I said, don't be offended. if you really want to be a writer, grow a thick skin and be prepared for a lot of criticism, good and bad.

Okay thank you and I will fix them :)

@ivy yeah I just put that little part in the story I meant to take it out.

Can't wait to hear more of the story!