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The Awakening of Artemis
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...and then my beta reader said, "Why didn't she just..."
(a sentence that never ends well)
"...throw him her sword?"
Which, obviously, would completely destroy the emotion of the scene. Fortunately, there was a very good reason why throwing him her sword wasn't an option. I just needed to make that clear. But I never would have noticed the problem without that comment.

I tried with each redraft to fix it but kept getting the same feedback. I finally hired an editor who I hope will help me with this challenge.
Yours?