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message 1: by Perla (new)

Perla Okay so I'm not sure if it's a preface or propluge or if there is a difference anyhow it's for Saved.

It tears your heart apart when you lose someone. It takes your heart beats it and throws it away. Just when you think it’s over and you can move on it twist and turns, tugging at you edges. A throbbing pain you can never quite shake. It’s to the point where you wish you were dead. And then……
And then you find a reason. You heart beats faster. Blood pumps through your body feeling you with a tingly since of hope. It fills your every moment. That butterfly feeling in your stomach like when your about to do something your scared of. Just as you get used to the warmth of your cheek death takes you by a spin. Everything repeats. You die. You live. You die. You live. You die. You live. You die…..
Luckily death is my close friend.


message 2: by Perla (new)

Perla Hello wrote: "hi ppl, thanks for looking here, i appreciate it. anyway, i need some help with a prologue (lol, i think you would consider this a prologue) for my story Shadows. I've never written one before, (Sh..."

oh and it's good i'm interested in reading shadows now but i think the last part when u worte " this is my story" is a little cliche



message 3: by Baxter (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 51 comments When I do prologues, which is almost always, I like to tie the end of it together with the beginning. Like you say one sentence at the start and you end with the same sentence.


message 4: by Perla (new)

Perla How about “ somehow I have to figure that out.


message 6: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi for a preface to a story that is really good. It makes you wonder: what is going on in that person's life? The reason we are here though, is not fate. We were created to bring praise to God - and no one does it very well including me. That's what we're here for.

As far as the prologue goes, take off the last 2 sentences. Then it will sound a lot better.
These are the decisions I have to face. And this is my story.


message 7: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi yes I could see that happening. and not putting God into a story that isn't going to be religious just makes the whole thing simpler. I've been trying to find ways to put God into some of my stories so that it won't turn people away from them because they're preachy. I don't have anything religious at all in any of my stories right now.


message 8: by Baxter (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 51 comments Pardon my French, but balls to them. That's the same as complaining that the the Declaration of Independence mentions god. If it sounds good, keep it in there, even if some people don't like it.


message 9: by Kendall Anne (new)

Kendall Anne (dance4life) | 182 comments I'm a Christian too, and if you want to put God in your story, then I think you totally should!! Theres nothing wrong with that!


message 10: by Baxter (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 51 comments The thing is, you don't have to be religious to mention god either.

Arthur C. Clarke wrote "The 9 Billion Names of God", and he was a total atheist. Or agnostic actually. But if it does sound better without it, obviously I'd be taking it out too.

Man, that bothers me.


message 11: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments DragonEyedMovingCastle Maniac wrote: "for a preface to a story that is really good. It makes you wonder: what is going on in that person's life? The reason we are here though, is not fate. We were created to bring praise to God - and n..."

I agree, the stroy would sound better that way.


message 12: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments Umm...


message 13: by Maryam. (new)

Maryam. | 70 comments How did the Quran come in to the discussion..???
You are Christian right??!!Your..Umm..Holy book isn't Quran...I'am a bit confused here


message 14: by Maryam. (new)

Maryam. | 70 comments I know Quran is the Islamic book....Lol..I'am a Muslim.
That actually is quite odd...


message 15: by Koori no hi (last edited Oct 02, 2009 02:50PM) (new)

Koori no hi this conversation is getting really interesting...
Thank you for starting this whole thing up Baxter!
I read in some article somewhere taht C.S. Lewis was studying the Bible at that point in time and having a real fight with his beliefs and logic, he did become a Christian later, but My grandpa did the same thing. He was having problems believing the Bible and he filled a notebook full of poems about it.


message 16: by Maryam. (new)

Maryam. | 70 comments Mnhm,I guess that is supposed to show what good a author they are....


message 17: by Baxter (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 51 comments Going back to Clarke (because I'm a huge fan of his), he didn't believe in any religion, but thought that the idea of God was really interesting.

Not exactly sure where I was going with this.


message 18: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi well, people often talk about what they think first when they respond.


message 19: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments Hello wrote: "lol, well than yes i guess you would know that. =P

ya, it is odd. the really odd thing is that a lot of authors who do write books based off other faiths is that they totally sound like their fr..."


Yeah!


message 20: by Perla (new)

Perla ........


message 21: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments =)


message 22: by Perla (new)

Perla 8D funny


message 23: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi 8D ive never seen this face before!


message 24: by Perla (new)

Perla It's my singature face


message 25: by Perla (new)

Perla lol 8D


Jessica ❀Sparky❀ | 24 comments Sweet! I agree with DragonEyesMovingCastle Maniac (whew!) that minus the last two sentences, the prologue is pretty good. :)


message 27: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments yup yup!!!! hello


message 28: by Koori no hi (last edited Oct 04, 2009 09:39AM) (new)

Koori no hi long name I know!LOL my friends here on goodreads just call me DE for dragon eyes


message 29: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments Good idea


message 30: by Perla (new)

Perla lol


message 31: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments =)


message 32: by Perla (new)

Perla 8D


message 33: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi again w/ the faces!!! AAAAAAaaaaaaaaa



message 34: by Koori no hi (last edited Oct 04, 2009 01:34PM) (new)

Koori no hi i don't know why those annoy me...
just ignore my complaints, I like to complain. Post whatever you want *Grins*


message 35: by Kendall Anne (last edited Oct 04, 2009 01:35PM) (new)

Kendall Anne (dance4life) | 182 comments LOL I totally will!!!!
O.o O.o


message 36: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi i figured as muck


message 37: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi *much


message 38: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments DragonEyes wrote: "again w/ the faces!!! AAAAAAaaaaaaaaa
"


sorry DE


message 39: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi haha, i have complaints about just about everything.


message 40: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments =)


message 41: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi hey look I'm doing the 50th post. This is the last one on this page!


message 42: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments So each page has 50 posts?


message 43: by Emma (new)

Emma (emmascout) Appearently.


message 44: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments coooooooooooooooooooooolll.....


message 45: by Emma (new)

Emma (emmascout) Yup!


message 46: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi LOL, ok, guys - sorta back on the prologue topic... Do you ever read the prologue of a story that is a sample of a later chapter and when you come to that part later in the book go back to the prologue to see if they say the same thing?
I can't help but do this in a lot of stories an they are almost never the same, usually there are even whole big details in the prologue that aren't in that part in the story.


message 47: by Emma (new)

Emma (emmascout) Yeah, in the book I'm reading-The Various, that happens, I haven't read the part yet, but I can tell it's in there.


message 48: by [deleted user] (new)

I'm sort of reading the Various too, and I think you're right


message 49: by Janeen-san (new)

Janeen-san  (misswannareadalot) | 647 comments Hello wrote: "ya, i've noticed that before! or like publishers will put a snipit of writing from the book on the back of the cover to make ppl interested, and then when you find that part in the book, it will be..."

Yeah!!


message 50: by Koori no hi (new)

Koori no hi In Water for elephants, the look ahead in the prolouge says that this horrible guy (that you get to know a little better in the actual story) gets killed by a woman he beat up, but in that part in the story, it was the elephant that killed him.


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