WIP Library discussion

Tell me anything i could do to make my stories better <3

From what I read it was really good and I was hooked.

awww thanksss!

Ofc <3

For the one without a name, i have a few name suggestions.

Ashes of the Past.
He/She/They is/are Always Behind Me

idk, prolly gonna have more at like 3 am when I cant be on, but ill get back to you on that

Oooo- thats a cool name

^^

I also think that you write a lot of first person. I LOVE first person, but its also good to branch out a little! Maybe try writing an introduction from a 3rd person perspective and see how you like it!

i'll try my best ^^

I think Castle Danger! Is in 3rd person

ooooo! Thats cool!

Ok, so I really love your writing style in general! The stories all had an intriguing story and amazing description. *Warning: I'm going into editor mode.

If you're looking for a bit more constructive criticism, there are a few things I have in mind.

Hit me with it

Alright.

In general, your prologues have a hook, but sometimes continues when it could have stopped, making it feel a little unfinished.

I really, really like the prologue for Ashes of the Past. It might be improved if the last line wasn't there in my opinion.

I think it could be the first line of the first chapter...

You don't have to take any of my suggestions though.

ooo- okay that sounds like a good idea actually-

Your writing is some of the best creative writing I've read, honestly.

huzzah- you should read Kipp's tho- his is great

Neptune~"I'm about as intimidating as a butterfly" wrote: "huzzah- you should read Kipp's tho- his is great"

I will if he chooses to share. I love reading creative writing! (and writing it)

Ella✨(booktrovert) wrote: "Neptune~"I'm about as intimidating as a butterfly" wrote: "huzzah- you should read Kipp's tho- his is great"

I will if he chooses to share. I love reading creative writing! (and writing it)"

He has his own group for his WIP book!

Neptune~"I'm about as intimidating as a butterfly" wrote: "Ella✨(booktrovert) wrote: "Neptune~"I'm about as intimidating as a butterfly" wrote: "huzzah- you should read Kipp's tho- his is great"

I will if he chooses to share. I love reading creative writi..."

oooooooh

Ella✨(booktrovert) wrote: "Neptune~"I'm about as intimidating as a butterfly" wrote: "Ella✨(booktrovert) wrote: "Neptune~"I'm about as intimidating as a butterfly" wrote: "huzzah- you should read Kipp's tho- his is great"

I..."

i think I invited you-

ok I'll check

I don't see it, sry

I have to go, see you guys! :)

see ya

ok I'm back! anyone here?

Ella✨(booktrovert) wrote: "ok I'm back! anyone here?"

This is Kipperdoodles group ^^

The Boy and The Bottles: Book Review and RP!

Awwwh, you didnt have to do that TvT

♢Kipp♢[FREE ~PALESTINE] wrote: "Awwwh, you didnt have to do that TvT"

i wanted to bud

I'm glad that I'm in both now! :)

hey, so i have a question about one of the stories

Hm?

“Wow, I didn't know you were related to him. She’s your sister, huh?"

is the him a mistake, or is his sister male?

OOP- I THOUGHT I FIXED THAT-

it twas a mistake

oh ok, cool!

In The Last Ones, Chapter 1, paragraph two: “Business.” There shouldn't be a period there because it's not the end of the sentence.

Also, I'm really sorry if I'm being overly judgy

There's really nothing else to fix.

I think it was really great!

It felt a little unfinished, though

In the next chapter I'd really like to know what she meant about Willow being a professional

You could start with him going and talking/asking her about that

🤷

i'll for sure explain that more, and i'll check it out

For Ashes of the Past, I think it's basically perfect

Yayy, i gotta work on the story more tho tbh