Ink in My Veins discussion

Okay, so I'm writting a book. The tittle I have right now is Elixer. I have it up on my page if anyone wants to read it. I really want to continue writting it but I have way to much dialog and I don't know how to get rid of some or add some discription into it. Can anyone help me????

hmmmmm try instead of actually writing the dialogue, like if somebody's arguing, instead of going 'yes!' she said 'no!' he said over and over again, just say they fought back and forth, get it? or if say somebody's giving directions, u dont actually need to say the directions, just say 'he gave directions and they were off', you know?
hope that helped!

I don't think a lot of dialogue is a necessarily bad thing. As long as the dialogue is natural and sounds good, then having a lot could improve your story.

I have more dialogue than anything else in my story, and people seem to like it okay.

holly youve gotta be kidding.

we LOVE IT. not like it okay

Dialogue is great. I think it's one of the strongest points in a story. Don't get rid of it. You should only worry about making it realistic and interesting. :)

Ah, Sella. I have to apologize to you.

What pretty much everyone has said.

see if you read what i wrote i think you guys might think i DO have too much dialog....im beggining to think that too

Maybe you should be a screenwriter.

Daniela wrote: "Okay, so I'm writting a book. The tittle I have right now is Elixer. I have it up on my page if anyone wants to read it. I really want to continue writting it but I have way to much dialog and I do..."

haha i'm just liek that!! only i really dont care ;P cuz im weird like that....

Holly wrote: "Maybe you should be a screenwriter."

i would be but im only 15

I want to be a director or a screenwriter or something, it would be so cool to make movies. Right now Im working on a documentary for my collage apps to film school.

Daniela wrote: "Holly wrote: "Maybe you should be a screenwriter."

i would be but im only 15"

So what? I'm only fifteen. Who cares how old you are?

Juliet wrote: "I want to be a director or a screenwriter or something, it would be so cool to make movies. Right now Im working on a documentary for my collage apps to film school. "

errrr i know what a director is but waz a screenwriter?

A screenwriter is the person who writes the script. :P

ohhhhhhhhhhhh...... i really don't thin kyou're writing to much dialoge... and RIGHT MORE!!! IT'S SOOOOO GOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!! THEY'RE JUST ABOUT TO TELL HER AND SHE HAS THIS FREAKY DREAM AND YOU JUST STOP AND IM LIKE "WHAT THE FREAK?"

haha

i think dialogue is fine.... i mean if you can only explain a situation in dialogue, so what's the problem? let it be that way....btw it was nice...i read it!!!!keep it going

Holly wrote: "Ah, Sella. I have to apologize to you."

Um ... why? I'm confuzzled.

Sella wrote: "Holly wrote: "Ah, Sella. I have to apologize to you."

Um ... why? I'm confuzzled."

I don't remember... That was a long time ago, and I was feeling really bad about something I said to you... I forget what it was, though.

Okay ... I don't know what it was. But now I'm curious. Darn. :P

I memembered. Where I was yelling at you to stop whining about nano. I felt really bad about that. B[

Oh. I don't know about Sella, but I didn't think you were being too hard on her. Tough love and all that.

That is my philosophy, but I think I was a little harsh.

A little, I guess. But Sella's tough.

This is true.

Mmhmm.

i like pic Acacia. Its facinating.

Mmhmm.

Catherine wrote: "hmmmmm try instead of actually writing the dialogue, like if somebody's arguing, instead of going 'yes!' she said 'no!' he said over and over again, just say they fought back and forth, get it? or ..."

This is good advice sometimes, but I wouldn't reduce your dialogue like that all the time. If someone is arguing, it might be good to show their emotions. To help your dialogue, you could add in descriptions of their faces getting red, their hands clenching, etc- whatever describes your situation, so that readers can get a good picture of the scene, not just a courtroom account of what everybody said. I'd be careful too, about reducing it to basically saying "they argued"-- it's much better to *show* what happened than to just *tell* your readers what happened. When you show, it draws your readers into the storyline. An awesome example of good writing is Robyn McKinley's books- I suggest getting one of her books and analyzing it's dialogue and description.

Oh man! I just had an idea for how you could train yourself to write more description in your dialogue!
When your siblings (provided you have some) or friends get in an argument, watch them carefully for how they look and what they do. Take note of when they pause to think, or when their face clearly shows they think the other person won, or if they have a look of stubborn defiance on their face. Then, when you have the chance, go write it all down as it happened, and don't worry about getting the dialogue word-for-word. Focus instead on the description. Do this for all kinds of situations-- even boring ones, so that eventually when you write a scene in your story that might not be totally exciting, even then you can pull out interesting observations and descriptions to keep your reader interested.
Jeez-- *I* am going to do this!

Holly wrote: "I memembered. Where I was yelling at you to stop whining about nano. I felt really bad about that. B["

STOIC BIKER DUDE IS SUPPOSED TO BE STOIC

Dialogue is actually good. As a writer, you're supposed to "show, not tell". For example, instead of just telling how often two characters fight, show that by writing a fight between them. So dialogue isn't necessarily bad. It's definitely good to have other stuff, but it's okay if you don't have big long paragraphs uninterrupted by speaking.

Yeah

"Show not tell", gah!
My teacher still tells us that and Im in a class of freaking 18 year olds.
But yes, thats good.
Dialouge is fun.
And the average reader would get really bored and confused with out dialouge.

lol thats so ironic cuz today we had a writers workshop in english class and it was all 'show not tell' theme

:)

haha

Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HI YA!! wrote: "ohhhhhhhhhhhh...... i really don't thin kyou're writing to much dialoge... and RIGHT MORE!!! IT'S SOOOOO GOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!! THEY'RE JUST ABOUT TO TELL HER AND SHE HAS THIS FREAKY ..."

Wait are you talking about Elixer???