Writing Passionates discussion

so for my story Outcast (http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/1...) the time period is supposed to be right now, the 21st century- and the village is just a secluded spot, among other villages, far away from modern cities/civilization. and none of the villagers know that there's anything else out there...and when lavender/kahi travel to find a cure for the disease, they stumble across a modern city...

but now i'm having second thoughts about it, because i don't know if its realistic. Is it possible that there would be an indian (native american) village somewhere a little away from a high-tech city?? there's no such thing in real life, is there? what should i do?!?

oh and one more thing...i just realized that i've been using modern "slang" throughout the whole story, but they're separated from the modern world, so how would they have modern slang words in their vocabulary? (such as "yeah, darn" etc)

Help please?? :D

Actually, there are indian "villages" like that. But I only know of one . . . I hope that helped. And its possible that they could know modern slang.

Eh, don't worry about it. Just keep writing, and edit it later. :)

And they could have an entirely different language, which could translate into english as the common slang.

Oh, as far as the secluded village, it's possible, for sure. and they wouldn't have to be an indian (and by indian I assume you mean native american) village. It could be an african or middle eastern village. Or someplace else. Actually, I always imagined it as an african village.

just one more thing:
in one of the early chapters you mentioned alarm clocks. The reference stood out a lot more than it should have. I just forgot to mention it when I commented on the chapter originally.

Thanks, Seth and Roni. So I don't think the fact that the village is there is a problem anymore...and I haven't really thought about whether it's Native American or African or whatever.

Roni, I thought that too- that maybe they're speaking a different language, and so slang is the translation- but it's not possible in my story, because later the main character meets this other person from the city and interacts with him, and she couldn't if they spoke two different languages. So maybe I'll just keep writing it with the regular "slang," and at the end I'll either go back and change it, or keep it that way...

Roni, When I made a reference to alarm clocks, that was sort of the "narrator" talking, not Lavender thinking about it. None of the villagers know what alarm clocks are, of course, but the narrator did...does that make sense? If it doesn't, maybe I should change that reference...

Depends who the narrorator is :-/ But I can't say much, because I haven't read the story yet! But I do plan on it!

Thanks. :D But I think I'll change the alarm clock line...and I'm still debating whether to change all the "slang" talk...*sigh*

I just learned about the Indians! Yes people still live on Reservations, but they're normal people like us. You've got to remember that so says my teacher. They don't wear feathers, or braids, or ride horses, they own cars, they have actual houses, etc. There's neighborhoods like that.
I took a test on it today, so I guess you could say i'm a smart alec on that.

Yeah, they're basically normal people, only they have different beliefs and customs.
So you could say that they were on a reservation, but that people have stopped coming to it. Like, some people came. But then they all left, and no one comes. And they got the slang from some of the first people who've come.

ooh want to know what's sad?!
The California Natives, were massacred and turned into slaves, and forced onto Spanish Missions, because they believed that they didn't have any religion! That's so sad!!
But that's the past.

Past is yesterday!
Tomorrow is so far away!
So let's just live today!
Come on, Come on!

sorry randomness.

lol, well said.

Hmm...I know about the modern Indian reservations, but that's not what Lavender's village is...

And Riley, that's a really good idea!! Maybe all the adults know that there are people out there, that used to come a really long time ago, but now they don't anymore, and that's why the kids don't know about the outside world, but still talk in slang...hmm...

Thank you Sella! Glad I could help.

Oh wow...I've never read that book, but it does sound a lot like mine!!

And I also had this idea, that maybe the other cities have the village there as a kind of "experiment," just to see how they would behave...

Hey, don't the TRADERS come to the village every year or whatever?

Don't the traders live in the outside world?
Couldn't they have passed on the slang?

oh, I read Running Out of Time ... it was a little similar, now that I think about it. But Sella, I think your story makes more sense. XD

Hmmm. I don't really think the village should be an experiment. That would make it even more like Running Out of Time. Or like that part in Uglies ... But anyway, it's your story, and whatever you decide to do, I'm sure I'll love it. :D

omg, haha, roni. i never even considered that!! haha i'm so stupid. you're right!! that fixes the slang problem!! OMG I'M SOO HAPPY!! XD lol

anyways, brigid, you're right...that's what i thought too, how it's like uglies when it's an "experiment." I don't think I'm going to have it one. But I feel happy now because now I don't have to change all the slang!! YAY!! XD

YAY XD

I need to read the Uglies, but my school just doesn't seem to have it every time i want to read it.

I love those books

I LUV UGLIES!! XD XD XD

YOU NEED TO READ UGLIES!! OMG THEY'RE SOOOOO AMAZING!! XD

!!!!!!!!!!

lol when I was reading Specials I finished it in one day and refused to eat or talk to anyone until it was finished.

This sounds like a M Night Shamylan movie, I think it was called the Village?

i think i've heard of that ...

It does sound sortof like The Village, I just realized, but it has a completely different plot. The girl goes out of her "Village" because her fiance is dying. And she is blind. And the adults dress up as evil monsters to scare the people from goign to the "outside world" anyway,ya. not that much like it at all.

I've never heard of The Village. Um...it sounds strange. XD

Its a bit creepy. Very scary.

Okai dokai...

I love The Village its one of my fave movies

Okay lol XD

*shudders* We own that movie. Very scary. And with those red capes....

I don't think I'll ever watch it...or should I?

It was a good movie ... just really scary.

me no likey scary movies

Me either, really. My parents were watching it, and well, I got caught up in the movie, then I had a nightmare. It was a really creepy movie.

oh nooo! XD yeah i just hate scary movies. i can't even watch the trailers for them ... gaaaah ...

Like those saw movies! Ugh!

One time I was all like watching TV and like this commercial came on for a scary movie and this monster thing was like coming out of a dryer and then I was afaid of like the washer and the dryer for a month/

Ugh I hate scary movies too!! I can't watch them. I get sooo freaked out and then I can't sleep, and when I do I get nightmares. :(

same. XD haha

Oh I get really freaked and then when the movie is over pass out instantly. Then the next morning I'll be scared of soething random.

Yeah same here! If I watch a scary movie, for at least a week after I get really freaked out at the tiniest noises.

I don't like scary movies much.

I mean, I have watched a total of 6 in my entire life. NONE of them were scary.

One was just said, and the others were too cheesy to not laugh at.

I mean, I watched frankenstien yesterday, and it was really funny when he threw the girl in the lake to see her float!

Oh, but I LOVE horror stories. They're just so... AMAZING!

horror stories are cool. heehee. :D has anybody read coraline?! that book is scary ... not like REALLY scary, but ... scary. haha

Have any of you read Wait 'till Helen Comes? That one's creepy.

I want to so badly