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message 1: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Post YOUR writing here to get feedback from others. You can copy and paste into a comment box, you can tell how to get to your stories/poems, or you can make a link (although i'm not really sure how to do that :P)


message 2: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
you go to the page where you can get to your stories, you go up to the http thing at the top of the window, highlight it, press copy, go to this page, make a comment, and left click it to get to the drop box like you did earlier and ress paste, then you press the post button, and then it will show up on this page!!!!! MAGIC XD


message 3: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Thanks Ana!


message 4: by Shreya (new)

Shreya C. (darthallow) Eco-Kingdom PressRelease
Where does loyalty to your planet AND hosting spazzy adventures prevail? If you replied Eco-Kingdom, you're right!! This park revolves around it's ultimate theme, eco-friendly and futuristic. Located at the topmost level of Cruise of the Clock Amusement Parks, tourists explore breathtaking buildings and amiable rides. Bounce thunderbolts into energy on Electric Square, or discover funky attire at the Modern Green store. After all, we are the... fun of the future!!! So what justifies our park as your utopia? Besides promoting environmentally good choices, Eco-Kingdom ensures entertainment for the whole family, while others dispute on transportation troubles.
First among all, Eco-Kingdom uses resources devoted to Mother Nature's health. Almost 90% of our park construction uses "green" materials like bamboo and biodegradable plastics. Our Solar Skyscraper and Lunar Diner eateries even boast spectacular robotic service powered by the sun and moon! Instead of spending dreary hours researching eco-friendly organizations, why not live the experience? Your top priority is Eco-Kingdom!! In fact, every 4 out of 5 people say they want to visit Eco-Kingdom in hopes of preserving nature. The public presses concerns about our planet, and Eco-Kingdom never descends to ensure it's safety.
Next, the attractions at Eco-Kingdom can reach out to everyone. Younger children delightfully use mops and sponges to activate games at The House of Soap Bubbles. Watch their jaws drop as their swings at Green City Park magically sway at the touch of a button! Even Walt Disney claims," Kids who've never seen Disney World can't miss this oppurtunity!" What about those couch-potatoe teenagers? The Giant Ipod Gallery is the stop! This attraction displays huge iPods and iPads to text with, e-normous game competitions with friends, and "geo-gadgets". Or do you desire a diversion from technology? Autumn Peak provides a diving area using a never-seen-before Leaf Generator 2000 to provide Earth's favorite decor- fall leaves! As for adults who favor more rejuvenating areas....our Green City Resort owns high-tech exercise machines and patented luxury massages. The family-first package of fun is here at Eco-Kingdom!
Lastly, despite these bright prospects, people still protest because of tiring walks throughout and presuming it too far from home to encounter. Cruise of the Clock looms the vast Meditteranean sea. Ergo, the vacation translates into a difficult undertaking! So.. we have a five-star cruise anticipating your company aboard the trip to Cruise of the Clock! Our crew tends to the US, Canada, UK, Middle East, and several Asian countries. Let us come to you! And what about walking within Eco-Kingdom's borders sluggishly, you ask? A monobus ride delivers an intriguing tour to each attraction, free! They'll vanquish your aches so you may truly cherish the journey. As for those who prefer a stroll, benches strew themselves among our park conveniently. Although transportation is an issue, we have reassuring responses.
Throughout this essay, you can see why Eco-Kingdom is the "fun of the future". We help the Earth and provide everyone a suitable attraction for their age, while solving worries by eradicating potential troubles. At only $30 per person and a 10% discount for senior citizens, it's well-priced. Come Mon. through Fri. from 9 am to 10 pm, or 8 am to 12 pm on the weekend. Don't persist the same amusement route - let Eco-Kingdom embrace you at Cruise of the Clock, Atlantis Island. Because life should be stockful of new oppurtunities.

Sorry its so long! So in English we have to make up an amusement park and write a persuasive essay for new tourists to go there. Is it good?


message 5: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
why yes yes it is...i dont have a worldof my own...my world credit goes to sega cuz my worldd is mobius...yuou know the world sonic is from ^^


message 6: by Shreya (new)

Shreya C. (darthallow) yu luv him too??!!! hello, twin! mobius OWNS. But the amusement park has to be our own idea, so sonic must be let go ='(


message 7: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
^^ FUDGE THATS NINJA!!! NOW BOOKLAND CAN GET ATTACK BY FANGIRLS!!!!!!! *glances out the corner of her eyes8 OH MY CHAOS!!!! ITS TAILS!!!!!!!!!!!*attacks hugs her action figure, then hides it behind her back* i mean i dont have an action figure of him...im not that creepy.....


message 8: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
i'm eatin candy hearts...probably not the best thing for me to be eating right now...it is 3 minutes till i have to go to bed........XD


message 9: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) @Shreya-that was awesome! I honestly wasn't sure if you were making this up or advertising for your work! If you don't get an A on this...
The only thing I saw-it really isn't important at all- is you said "never-seen-before". Usually, it is "never-before-seen"
But like I said, that doesn't really matter. If this is ever built, I want the first tickets!


message 10: by Theresa ♫ (last edited Jan 25, 2012 09:06PM) (new)

Theresa ♫ (tuhreesaaah) | 4 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/5...

Alrighty, here is ze link to my writing. :) Please criticize as much as you want. Yell in all caps if needed. :)
I hope you enjoy. I ask for an audience! :D


message 11: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (xxmyusernamexx) | 4 comments Hi! So here's my story. It's called Broken Beyond Repair and it's a Romance; Mystery/Suspense. I would LOVE some feedback!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Thanks! xx


message 12: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Thanks Alyssa! I will get around to reading it as soon as possible...cross your fingers! :P


message 13: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (xxmyusernamexx) | 4 comments Brooklyn (Bubbles!! My bubbles) wrote: "Thanks Alyssa! I will get around to reading it as soon as possible...cross your fingers! :P"

Yay! *desperately tries to cross fingers* lol


message 14: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
here's all mhy stories/pomes/whatever:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/3...


message 15: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Alyssa, I loved(!!) your story! when you add on to it you need to tell me!(!!!!!!!) :P


message 16: by Shreya (new)

Shreya C. (darthallow) Someone comfort me. I just got dissed by some girl on Spinchat and it really hurt when the others in the chatroom joined in and tried to kick me out. And then the operator told me to calm down. i was so hurt.


message 17: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
that sucks.....and i sorta know how you feel...... (try being in my seminary class....) ummmm i have noooooo clue...... :/


message 18: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Uck, I hate it when people are like that.

I don't know if this will make you feel any better, but you might want to pity them instead of yourself. I mean, they're obviously not smart enough to know how to interact with other people, and someday you might find them flipping burgers at Wendys, and nobody likes them cuz they're so mean, and they can't get a good job, while you'll be the successful multimillionaire who happens to eat at Wendys every now and then...

:P


message 19: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
hahahahahahahahaaaa


Kayla ~The Mirthful Messiah~ (Chucklevoodoos142) Shreya wrote: "Someone comfort me. I just got dissed by some girl on Spinchat and it really hurt when the others in the chatroom joined in and tried to kick me out. And then the operator told me to calm down. i w..."

People are such jerks! I'm so sorry you had to go through that! (And I agree with Brooklyn! I can't wait to laugh in their faces!) XD


message 21: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
me neither....... "wow this character on this video game has an amazing voice! who voices _____ ...OMG SHE DID THAT VOICE! BUT WAS THE FREAK AT SCHOOL!!!! WHAT THE HECK" XD


message 22: by Yulia, Only Organizer person here XP (new)

Yulia (yuliasel) | 9 comments Mod
Mine:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
Sorry, the description is a draft. I will try to change it soon. :)


message 23: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Thanks, Dreamer! (sorry, I don't know what else to call you :P) I will try to get to it as soon as possible!


message 24: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (xxmyusernamexx) | 4 comments Brooklyn (Bubbles!! My bubbles) wrote: "Alyssa, I loved(!!) your story! when you add on to it you need to tell me!(!!!!!!!) :P"

I uploaded chapter 7!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 25: by [deleted user] (new)

Mine! ((I'll try to update soon as possible.))((it's an HP fanfic!))

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 26: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) I'll try to read soon!


message 27: by Shayne (new)

Shayne (shaynechristina) | 6 comments Here's mine:
(PG-13: Mild cussing. [Sowwwy:(])

The little paragraph thing:

What happens when you are stuck with something you dread and the only thing stopping you from refusing it is the survival of your twin?

Or how about when you fall in love and then they end up taking away your freedom and holding you hostage?

The worst is when you find out that everything you ever heard was either a lie or a scheme.

And then there is always the one who doesn’t have the power to make their own decision over anything; mind control or not.

For some people being Gifted is, well… a gift. But for these four teens it’s anything but a decorated box with a bow on top.



http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/8...

I would love feedback and any comments or criticism! DON'T BE AFRAID TO YELL AT ME!!!:D Please like it if you have read it. Thanksss:)


message 28: by [deleted user] (new)

I have this fanfic:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7810610/1...

Please review!!!


message 29: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Shayne, if you change the swear words just long enough for me to read it, I'd love to!


message 30: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (xxmyusernamexx) | 4 comments I updated my story(Broken Beyond Repair) for anyone who's reading!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 31: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Oh, Awesome! will read soon...


message 32: by [deleted user] (new)

i love it,alyssa!!!


message 33: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) I wrote the start of a book, don't know if I will write, just wanted to know what you think.

I'm fourteen years old and I'm in prison. It's not the kind of prison you're thinking about, though, the ones full of ugly tattooed men in orange jumpsuits, and bars and concrete and handcuffs. Well, some of it's the same. But a lot's different, too. All of us in here, we all have one thing in common. And it's not tattoes. It's WHY we're in here. Treason.
Now, I know what you're thinking. Okay, actually I don't, but it's probably something like, treason? how could you?, or, you're only fourteen! That's a little young, don't you think?, or, what's for lunch?
I'm with you on that one. What is for lunch?
Sorry. Sometimes I'm easily distracted. Somebody called me ADD once, but that person was a pathological liar, so who knows? I don't even know what it means, or stands for, or anything. Maybe it was code. Maybe it could have saved his life, because he kind of died right after that. I kind of killed him.
Now you're probably thinking, you killed the poor sweet innocent patho?, or, you're a bit young, don't you think?, or, something smells good! Is Mom making cookies?
Well, he wasn't poor, or sweet, or innocent. He actually deserved it. Unless, of course, calling me ADD was a code to say he was on my side. And I WAS a bit young. And I hope your mom is making cookies, so you can have a little piece of happiness, even though it won't last and when you're a hobo living in a cardboard box you'll wish you never had it, because once you know the good it is so so much harder to take the bad.
You see, I wasn't always a double-crossing, lying, murdering traitor in prison. No, it started much simpler than that.

The little announcement popped up on my hoverscreen, telling me school was out. I instantly turned off the screen and walked sedatedly out the door with my classmates, but as soon as we were outside, we burst into life.
All around me kids were talking or laughing or running or screaming, just because they could. This was my favorite time of day, when the atmosphere turned form stifling to alive, when I could tip back my head and laugh at nothing in particular, just the relief of being out of school and the sun warming my long brown hair. Oh how I miss the sun.
Anyway, my friend, Extravagent, came up to me. "Hey Mag, want to go boarding?"
I guess I should explain the names.
Fourteen years ago, everybody got it in their heads that their kid was the best. Absolutely. Without a doubt. So they gave us all really dumb names, like Extravagent or Magnificence. But Extra and I, even then, seven years old, were a bit rebellious, I guess, and we shortened our names to not sound so...extravagent. Extravagent became Extra, or sometimes Ex, and I became Mag, or Mags. Or, like my father called me, Maggie. I liked that the best. He said his great-great-grandmother's name was Maggie. I'm still not sure if I beleive him. I mean, who would name their kid Maggie?
I turned to her. "Sure! Let me tell my parents." I quickly pulled up my hoverscreen. Message to parents, I thought. Compose: I'm going boarding with Extra. I'll be home for dinner. Then, just before I send it, I change Extra to Extravagent.
Technically, it isn't against the rules to shorten names, but it is frowned on by most adults. Including my mother.
I've often wondered if I'd be the same way, as an adult. I never thought I would, I'd be more like my father. He doesn't act like a stuffy I'm-grown-up-so-I-know-more-than-you adult, or like a kid. He can play like a kid, run and climb and throw, but he's still an adult, in a nice, I-know-what-you're-going-through sort of way.
Then I wonder if my mother ever thought she would be that way too. Then I wonder if, even though I don't think so, I'll turn out like her.
Well, I'll never find out. Didn't I mention? My death sentence is carried out in twelve days. I have twelve days to live.


message 34: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Please tell me what you think, but be nice, this is my unedited first draft. ;P


message 35: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (last edited May 10, 2012 05:13PM) (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
nice XD


message 36: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) thnx!


message 37: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
:D


ᑕᗢᗝᒪḰᓮᖙᖇᗢჯ123 ☆*・゜゚・*\(^O^)/*・゜゚・*☆ Cool (coolkidrox123) | 43 comments Mod
this is a prologue to a story in dovelopment

PROLOGUE
Cara the Peace dragon lay down in her cave. She had been feeling sick and not even Phoebe the healer dragon could cure her. She saw a dark shadow approaching. She felt too dizzy to get up. She could only watch the shadow getting closer. She knew that the shadow was an hour's fly from her cave.That was a good thing about being a dragon; you have a very sharp sense of sight. Cara looked at the sinking sun, turning the sky a light shade of orange.
When the shadow finally landed in Cara's cave the sun had already set. It was Silver the Fate and Destiny dragon. She landed as silent and as smoothly as a cool summer's breeze.
"Cara, I came as soon as I heard the news!" Silver Exclaimed. Cara smiled faintly, if a dragon could smile.
"No need to worry!" She said, barely a whisper. Silver had a worried look on her face and she was very fidgety.
"I had a vision last moon fall!" She told Cara in almost a hiss. Cara frowned.
"Isn't Mia the one with the visions?"
"I don't know!" Silver complained.
"What was in this... vision?" Asked Cara. Flames where now coming out of Silver's nostrils.
"I saw twenty kids___" She began but was cut off by Cara's feeble snort.
"Twenty kids? Is that what you're so worried about?" She demanded.
"These aren't normal kids!" Cara frowned at this. "These kids have the aura of dragons!"


message 40: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
sweet ^^


message 41: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) That's awesome! Will read...eventually...sorry, I'm kinda bad about reading stories on here. My parents decided I only get 40 minutes on the computer >:(, so I don't usaully have time...But I will try!


Kayla ~The Mirthful Messiah~ (Chucklevoodoos142) That sucks...


Kayla ~The Mirthful Messiah~ (Chucklevoodoos142) NOT THE STORY!!! I LOVED THE STORY!!!


message 44: by Anastacia *gaining love*, You know from TV (new)

Anastacia *gaining love* Asbury | 15015 comments Mod
kayla...i think we all know what you were talking about


message 45: by [deleted user] (new)

Ugh... James' PoV:
She's the most Beautiful Redhead…the one I saw going to the Gryffindor table after being Sorted….The one who beat my lines….

The one who…

Has eyes as green as a fresh pickled toad

Hair as red as a flame

Face as beautiful as a flower

The Lily flower, that lives up to her name

Yeah, pretty much her….

Her eyes as green as a fresh pickled toad…..her smaragdine eyes…..I always get lost in those…..I become an idiot and all clumsy when I look into those pair….Those almond-shaped, emerald-green laser beams(that's when she glares at me :( ) I wonder what she will look like in hazel eyes…hmmmm…

Her hair as red as a flame…..I wish I could play with that soft mass of red curls (we can make a fashion 'trend' of electric-shocked hair, don'cha think? )…It's so good to play with it while kissing snogging her…

Face as beautiful as a flower…..Mind more brilliant than that Muggle scientist Eistain? Eishtun? I can't remember….bummer shit ….

The Lily flower, that lives up to her name…..

That lives up to her name…..

Oh yeah, the best part…The EXCITING part…

SHE'S MY GIRLFRIEND11!...

And she's Lily Evans…


ᑕᗢᗝᒪḰᓮᖙᖇᗢჯ123 ☆*・゜゚・*\(^O^)/*・゜゚・*☆ Cool (coolkidrox123) | 43 comments Mod
Kayla SHADOWPUNCHIN'SONIC!! wrote: "NOT THE STORY!!! I LOVED THE STORY!!!"

OMG LOL!!!! ^_^


message 47: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) That's awesome! Try to leave out swear words, though. Thnx!


ᑕᗢᗝᒪḰᓮᖙᖇᗢჯ123 ☆*・゜゚・*\(^O^)/*・゜゚・*☆ Cool (coolkidrox123) | 43 comments Mod
hmm... ok here is a sample chapter of teh kingdom of ilca:

(first draft of tara's first chapeter)

Tara

Tara leaned against a basket of herbs. She was sitting on a patch of grass, waiting for one of the dark warriors to finish regestrating. thier boat while the others were getting it ready for departure. One dark warrior was siting next to her on a crate, makeing sure she didn't make an attempt to escape. She cursed herself for the hundredths time for getting herself caught. She had gotten away with it since she was 7! Why did all of that effort to stay inconspishous was all for nothing!vShe could try to escape, she had already come up with many strategies almost subconsiously. But that wouldn't be honorable, she had been thout that its more honorable to go with your defeaters rather then run away.

Tara knew who eacha nd every dark warrior that was accamponing her. The one that was gaurding her now used to be her good friend. His name is Zach. He had only resently become a dark warrior. He was 19 and on his very first mission as a dark warrior. He kept glancing at her, disbeliving that she was a girl. They had spent three years trainning as squires together before he was chosen by a knight. If Tara hadn't been fo...............

(sorry for any typos, please give degative as well as posetive critisisem and be truthful!!)


message 49: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Interesting! Must. Read. More. !!! :P
One thing I don't get is the honor part. Why is it dishonorable to save yourself?


message 50: by Brooklyn (new)

Brooklyn (thebridge) Coolkidrox123 {The coolest of them all!} wrote: "http://coolkidrox123.wordpress.com/20..."

Awesome!


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