Twelve children kindly agreed to help test Smelly Trolls - The Gamebook. Thanks to all the children who took part. Here are some examples of your feedback and my responses to your suggestions.

One girl, called Emily, commented: 'Some of the sentences were a bit long/wordy.'

Feedback from Emily

So I wrote a computer program that broke the book into sentences and then arranged them in order of length. This helped me to determine any that were unnecessarily wordy.

The longest sentence was:

'The sunse...