What's 812 Reading? discussion

If you could change something about your book, what would it be?
-More action?
-Dialogue?
-More interesting language? Sentence structure?

For a “4”: Did I….
• Write a topic sentence that provided the title, author, and genre of my text?
• Provide context of what is happening in the text, so my reader understands what I’m talking about?
• Find a direct quote from the text that proves my idea?
• Thoroughly explain the significance of my quote/how it proves my idea?
• Check for correct punctuation and spelling?

In the book Rising Voices by young native american teens, one thing I would change about the book would be the last chapter. The reason I would change the last chapter of the book would be because, since the book is all about these different young native americans, and how they all experienced their lives, they should have one chapter of them speaking all together and maybe how was it like writing in the book. Another thing I would change about the book would be the way the book was strutured. For example, each perosn that writes a poem inside of the book should also have their story behind it and what made them write the poem, just a little bit more information in the text to make it much more interesting for the reader. One poem states, '' The Najavo land is coverd with trees, weeds, and animals. It has canyons and big mountains. The Najavo fought, suffered and died on this land. The Najavo long ago praye to keep the land we have now.''. This part of the poem shows this persons reservation and the things it has that make sit his home; However, this person should also include what is was like being on his reservation to give the reader more detail.

In the fantasy book, Untamed by P.C Cast and Kristin Cast, if I can change one thing in the book, it would be the amount of action in the book. In the part of the book that I am reading, Zoey's grandmother got into a car accident. Zoey was really worried of what happened to her grandma and she knows what caused the accident. It was the Raven Mockers of the evil spirit, Kalona, and he is about to rise and come back again. When Zoey's grandma got into the car accident, she called a nun that she knew, and she told her everything about Kalona rising, and how dangerous that would be. The thing that I would change is, there should be a Raven Mocker listening to them without them knowing. The reason that I would like to change that part is because, in the book, Aphrodite says, "...The Raven Mocker knew your grandma was going to the Chalkboard" (281). This quote shows that there was a Raven Mocker listening to Zoey, and her grandmother that she will be going to the Chalkboard tomorrow. Therefore, that might have caused the accident. This is why I wanted to have a Raven Mocker listening to Zoey telling Sister Mary Angela about the rise of Kalona, and revealing things to her. That will causeit to have more suspension to the book, which will make it more interesting to read. It will make me want to read more of what is going to happen such as, Sister Mary Angela being in danger, or Kalona rising, doing something bad to Zoey's grandma and Sister Mary Angela.

In the book "When theres a fork in the road" by Dave Kaplan. In the book I would not change anything because I really like it, and it has the perfect amount of dialouge,action. But one thing that I would change is there is not enought detail like in one chapter something was being described and I couldnt picture it in my head and I couldn't really picture in my head what they were talking about. so that would be one thing I would change in the book " When Theres a Fork in the Road Take it" by Dave Kaplan.

The Nightmare Garden, a fantasy novel, by Caitlin Kittredge is the book of boredom so far! If I had to change something in the book, I would add more dialogue. In the beginning of this book, Aoife Grayson, my protagonist, had just realized her mother wasn't what she thought she would be. Her mother was a pure Faerie whom had used her and her brother, experiments for the LoveCraft company. The LoveCraft company is a very vicious group that uses whomever they get to update Mainhaven, the city they live in. Aoife didn't know her mom was using her and her brother at first, but when she found out, it was too late to go back. This caused Aoife to get mad and destroy the city. Aoife's dad couldn't do anything about it since he was only a mortal and couldn't interfere, or else he would be dead under the LoveCraft's power. Now, for some reason, Aoife regrets leaving her mother in the disruption of MainHaven. Since Aoife is half Faerie, half mortal, she still loves her mother no matter how cruel she is. On the other hand, Conrad Grayson, Aoife's brother, hates his mother because of her sins and wants to find his dad. He wanted to get away from the city as soon as possible. This part in the story so far has really bored me, since it was full of too many descriptions and context, the author should add more dialogue to make the text more adventurous and intense! One text that describes the overwhelming context is "But then I'd also be insane from the iron of LoveCraft, locked up with my mother, and who knew what would have happened with Conrad....." (22). This quote shows the thoughts going on in Aoife's head, thinking about her mother while worrying about her brother. This description went on in the text for about 3 paragraphs. I think there should be at least dialogue after the first paragraph. This context wasn't really that important, and I think Aoife should forget about it and move on. If there would be more interesting conversations, I would at least be more excited to read on.

In the fiction book the Maze Runner by James Dashner I would add more action in the book. Since I just started the book I am not that far in it. The book is about a boy named Thomas who does not know anything about himself. The book is a lot more dialogue than action so it can be a little boring at times. I would also like a chapter explaining who Thomas is. That would be more helpful for anybody who was reading the book so they would not be confused.

In the book "Rocket Boy" By Homer Hickman Jr there is a lot of intersting and fun stuff in it , but if I had the chance to change anything in the book it would be the energy and dialog of the story. To me the book just sounds and seems a little to boring for the person reading book. I would change the events a little in some parts of the book so that way the reader can have some fun while reading such a great story and make them a little more exciting. Even thoe This is a great book and the topic of it is cool , the way it was narrarated made it seem not cool. For example the only cool part was in the end when he seceded his goals in life. I would have made it more Interesting trying to get those goals.

In the book the Magician by Michael Scott the one thing would change would be the part when the huge evil monster Nidhogg took Scathach and Josh had to go and help get Scathach alone. So far in my book Josh and Sophie and the rest of the squad have found Saint Germain the master of fire. Sophie finally learned the magic of fire. Also she learned how to finally control here aura. Now Dee and Machiavelli have found the place where the squad is staying at and the unleashed a beast that is very powerful to invade the house. The reason why I would change this scene is because Josh had just begun his training with a sword and he wasn’t even good at using it Scathach even said it herself and yet he decides to go after a monster that is twice his size and that can kill him in a single hit. Also Josh does not like Scathach that much so why did he go after her when either Sophie can go with him along with the rest of the squad but instead Josh decides to go alone and all of this doesn’t really make much sense, that’s why I would change that scene. A quote from the book that shows this scene. “Scatty he called but there was no reply. His voice rose Scatty! Squinting hard, blinking away the spots dancing before his eyes, he saw the monster dragging Scathach out of the house. He decided to run after the monster Scatty I’m coming.”(278) this shows why I would want to change this scene. Josh barely knows how to handle the sword so how could he save scatty with nobody’s help also if that monster gets a hold of Josh too them Nicholas’s plan fails. This is why I would change that scene.

In the Realistic ficton book, 8th Grade Super Zero, by Olugbemisola Rhuday Perkovich, there is one thing I would like to change. The way the image is getting put into my head, its not very clear to me. reading a book is like an imaginary TV in your head and as your you're reading, you imagine what you read on to the screen. I can't really see much from that screen. So that is the only thing I would like to change. The book itself is good, but I think it can do better.

In Megan Bostic's fiction book "Never Eighteen", Austin goes on an adventure to solve people's problems so far. Austin is a 17 year old kid just enjoying his life days. One weekend, Austin suddenly decides that he needs to try to help solve people's life issues. He meets up with his crush named Kaylee since she had a car to help him travel around. First stop is Austin's best friend Jake that passed away because of a car accident. He goes to his house and has a short talk with Jake's mother. Next stop was Austin's ex-girlfriend named Juliana. He knew her new boyfriend Ben was always beating her and Austin wanted to help her out with the issue. Still, at the end, Juliana never accepted Austin's help. Austin goes to his grandma Peggy next to talk about life. After that, Austin went to face his fears. He ends up with Kaylee in the town fair. He bought all the food that was he can't handle eating and riding rides that he can't stand. Kaylee was still confused this whole time what Austin was trying to do. After the town fair, Austin gave an order to go to Allie's house. Austin talked about life with her, but she changed a lot. Allie had some horrible stories that caused her to be lonely and sad. Austin had no possible way to change the past, so he just heard the story and left crying. On page 34, Kaylee asked, "Next destination?", and then Austin responds the next destination. This keeps going on a few times throughout the story. I have been reading so far and Austin just goes from place to place with Kaylee to solve their friend's life problems. Some stories told by the person are interesting; however, it is almost the same excitement every time. That's why if I could change the book, I would add more action. Reading almost the same thing over and over again is just boring, some actions would keep me wanting to read more.

In the fiction book Trash by Andy Mulligan, is about Raphael that is a dump site boy. One day he finds a bag. Latter the cops are looking for the bag and will offer a huge sum of money, But Raphael denied that he has the bag. He plans on give the thing that he found because of the bag to a person. If i was to change on thing in this book it would be that, it will tell you more clearly who is talking. In this book the point of view or the person who talks keeps switching. It takes me a few pages to find out who is talking or who it is, because of this it makes the book confusing.

In the book "Seeing Emily" by Joyce Lee Wong , something i would change about the book is that they should make it more specific and explain what happens when she shows people her talent. Also like they should have put more action and said that she did competitions and everything and so since she liked someone i wonder what happened after that and they should of put more details on that like if she did not wanna do her talent or show it off anymore or stuff like that . Like just explaining better thats it because i feel like i don't get the book then

In the book "Monster" By Walter Dean Myers is about a 16 year old who is on trial for the murder of a store clerk and was at the wrong place at the wrong time. He was involved with the wrong people and got blamed for the murder of someone he didn't kill. I wouldn't change anything about the book it's really into detail about whats happening during his whole trial and it's kind of like reading a script because steve the main character in my book was going to flimaking class and wanted the story to be a movie about his life.

In the book "Specials" By Scott Westerfeld one of the things i would change in this book is the activities and the actions. I want to make the book have more exciting events because most of the time its just regular mysteries. Even thoe the book is good and interesting sometimes it gets boring in some moments. This book is good for those who like series books that are adventurous.