Dead Until Dark question

This is not about the above novel, but GR would not let me post unless I had book. Sorry!

I needed to clarify my thesis, but I had the basic structure. I will write out my entire first paragraph. My thesis is at the end.

Elizabeth Jennings’ poem, “Fragment for the Dark,” addresses the speaker’s internal suffering during the night and her attempting to find the power to overcome her dark confliction. The tribulation is not explicitly mentioned that encompasses her mind and body; however, assisted by imagery she provokes the emotions that she is restrained by. The solemn poem reflects an internal conflict the speaker attempts to overcome, but ultimately she returns to her original despaired metal state.


New/Clarified Thesis: The solemn speaker attempts to overcome the "fog" she feels within herself by wanting the power for the "magic to see grounded starlings" to conquer her internal conflict; ultimately she returns to her original despaired mental state as she commands for the lights in her house to accompany her until morning.

As a side note, I interpreted this poem in simple terms as negative, positive, negative. I thought that originally she was not able to escape the inexorable darkness that enveloped her, but then she garnered strength to want to make herself get better. In the end, the last line, "I have put every light on the house on. May their fragments last till true morning," I found this to be the uncertainty factor that prevailed in the beginning of the poem, signalling her ultimate defeat by the darkness.