I Love My Humor Dark. No Sugar, No Cream discussion

I wrote this Novella, right, and I want people to read it and give me feedback. I've gotten some feedback, from beta readers and early readers, but I WANT MORE!!!

It's quite dark & offensive, with an unlikable narrator (though I actually like him) -- I guess we all react differently to these kinds of things. Well, let me include Page 1, and let you decide.

I can send it through Facebook or Email, you choice!

Goodreads link: https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/3...

Here is Page 1:

It smelled of old dust and store-bought pizza. I looked down,
and besides my own feet, I saw two giant basketball sneakers
the colour of a dead Michael Jackson. Sickly white, like the
redneck cracker retard in that Catfish documentary.

I was home.

But I hadn’t seen my room yet. My future roommate came up
to the door and just kind of stood there. Eventually, he waved
his hand and said “Hi.” in a prepubescent voice, though he was
almost 20.

I assessed the situation. This guy had the body of an
overboiled carrot, the personality of a cardboard box, and the
intelligence of a cucumber. If I hung around him for long, I’d
turn into a zucchini.

I’m sure that in the eyes of his mother he was some
combination of Superman and Captain America; but to
everyone else, he was the reason abortion should be legal.

I did not know this at the time, but this guy was in hardcore
vegetable mode and that was how he spent his life.

His thoughts were trash.
His feelings were trash.
His body was made up of trash because that was all he ate.

If you made a movie about this guy’s life, it wouldn’t be called
“Waterworld” because he seldom showered, but it would be
called “Trashworld”.

His past, present, and future all sucked. It was written in stone
by God himself.

Theo wrote: "I wrote this Novella, right, and I want people to read it and give me feedback. I've gotten some feedback, from beta readers and early readers, but I WANT MORE!!!

It's quite dark & offensive, with..."

I'll take a crack at it. Send it to sslubliner@comcast.net. If you're up for a political satire that's offensive in its own right, check out my "Threeway." In paperback and $0.99 Kindle. Looking forward to your book.

Steven wrote: "Theo wrote: "I wrote this Novella, right, and I want people to read it and give me feedback. I've gotten some feedback, from beta readers and early readers, but I WANT MORE!!!

It's quite dark & of..."

Awesome! Just sent it your way!

**To people in genereal** -- If you want to get a feel for the book, read these two reviews:

1) https://www.goodreads.com/review/show...

2) https://www.goodreads.com/review/show...