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Hey everyone, I've gotten a lot of mixed feedback between those who love or hate the blurb. At this point, I just want to know if I should remove the last paragraph or not. (But any other critiques are also welcome!) Thanks in advance!

(This is for a SEQUEL novel)

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Jensen Edward Stringfellow used to be a thief. Now he’s on a quest to save the multiverse from the evil Overlord.

After getting one of three magic crystals said to have the combined power to bring down the Overlord, sixteen-year-old Jensen and his friends head to Hiro’s world to find the second crystal.

In a battle between life and death, Jensen struggles to determine what’s right and what’s wrong. He’s made mistakes before but now one wrong move can cause the destruction of the multiverse.

The crystals were supposed to be a magical solution, but now Jensen fears they alone will not be enough to combat the growing threat of the Overlord.

I’d delete the last paragraph. It feels like a “Dun-dun-daaa!” too many after the previous paragraph.

Phillip wrote: "I’d delete the last paragraph. It feels like a “Dun-dun-daaa!” too many after the previous paragraph."

Yes, I agree.

Yes, I agree about the last paragraph. It's like going back to explain what's been said. It sounds like a fun book.